Thank you letter

Room 11

Glen Innes School

24 September 2015

Dear Ms Parkes

Thank you for your help with my writing. I am trying my best to improve my writing. I am following the suggestions you have given us.  

I enjoyed writing a information report, attributes and recounts. I need help with my writing and I’m still struggling with these different types of writing. The reason  I like writing these three different types of writing is because it helps me write and imagine at the same time. My teacher had learnt what you have been teaching her in writing and she has been doing the same by teaching us what you’ve had taught her.

I  use apostrophe and speech marks correctly sometimes. Sometimes I  need to help to put them in the correct places.

Next term I will  practise writing a variety of sentences. Also editing is difficult and finding my mistakes . Persuasive writing is also my weakness.

I really appreciate your help Ms Parkes. Thank you so much.

Yours sincerely,

Serena   

Attributes

WALT: Write collaboratively (Liam,Serena,Megan)

Success Criteria: 1. Start the paragraph with a topic sentence.

                            2. Use a variety of sentences. ( simple, compound, complex)

Liam

The Genie was the best Genie of all times. One day he came to into our class. One of the student came up to him with a bad manners. Then I walked up to the Genie wishing that I want to show respect by talking nicely at all times and use my manners also focus on my work and do not show my bad behaviour in class ever again. Being a good student in class is amazing because once you are a great student you will receive good luck.

Serena

From the lamp a genie appeared and wished me honesty. Being honest about giving money to other people is just silly. I cannot buy friends. I realised I carried a lot of wait and I am going to do something about it. I am a good girl and respect the teacher whenever she’s stressing. I’m also worried about my mother's health. I also do cooking and cleaning and get really tried. This work makes me lack honesty. I will need to improve being honest at school and at home because sometimes I can be dishonest about everything at school and at home.

Megan  

Genie wanted the students in room 11 to behave and to be a loving person. The genie is confident whenever he does his job to solve people’s problems and he uses his brains to think about everything in his working place. When a genie appeared the meanest boys in class. The genie gives a student bad luck because the students was being very rude to him.